Mirko M ha chiesto in Società e cultureLingue · 4 mesi fa

Would you correct this for me?

Hi guys.

I'm trying to write down some info for my job. This is a letter that my company should send to foreign dealers. is it correct? Do you suggest any change? Help me, please.

Due to a specific business strategy, we avoid the use of area agents or salesmen

since we try to keep a direct contact to out affiliated rent network and with our

Dealers.

We are pleased to be both producers and distributors of our brand. 

Besides, we proudly inform you that TinTok has been the first company in the

world to launch on the market the folding e-bike, The Tin, with 20” fat wheels and,

soon after, Big Tin, with 24” fat wheels. Moreover, we are still the first and unique

company to have equipped our e-bike with a handmade sidecar, giving birth to

BEACH Tin.

We are pleased to send you herewith enclosed our catalogue with all flee bikes; We

also submit our best prices reserved to Official Dealers and Rent, together with our

company profile and the latest Press Review, which we invite you to consider. Part

of this review deals with several Tv reports broadcasted by the Italian television,

Rai1 Channel (on the news Tg1 Motori), by Rai Italia and by Rai Parlamento.

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  • 4 mesi fa

    Hi guys.

    I'm trying to write down some info for my job. This is a letter that my company should send to foreign dealers. is it correct? Do you suggest any change? Help me, please.

    Due to a specific business strategy, we avoid the use of area agents or salesmen

    since we are trying to keep a direct contact to our affiliated rent network and with our

    Dealers.

    We are pleased to be both producers and distributors of our brand. 

    Besides, we proudly inform you that TinTok has been the first company in the

    world to launch on the market the folding e-bike, The Tin, with 20” fat wheels and,

    soon after, Big Tin with 24” fat wheels was launched. Moreover, we are still the first and unique

    company to have equipped our e-bike with a handmade sidecar, giving birth to

    BEACH Tin.

    We are pleased to send you herewith enclosed our catalogue with all flee bikes; We

    also submit our best prices reserved to Official Dealers and Rent, together with our

    company profile and the latest Press Review, which we invite you to consider. Part

    of this review deals with several Tv reports broadcasted by the Italian television,

    Rai1 Channel (on the news Tg1 Motori), by Rai Italia and by Rai Parlamento.

    PS: non ho corretto quasi niente ma era scritto bene (mi dai 10 punti please)

  • Anonimo
    4 mesi fa

    Che ce ne fut  

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